Hey Craig,
Nice to see your first story attempt here, even though the story's title reminds me of the latest
Smurfs movie (lol).
http://icons.iconarchive.com/icons/giannis-zographos/premier-league-2010/128/Manchester-City-Home-icon.png
This story is definitely missing some
pictures, as in
screenshots of players, fixtures, matches, stats, your team... as well as
other images, like Man City's badge, special icon for when you write 'Man of the Match', etc. You don't have to upload all pictures on fmscout.com, you may use external ones in your posts too.
If you're feeling lost with the whole pictures thing, you might want to check out my
FM Screenshots Tutorial.
You could also benefit from some
extra text formatting. For example you could utilize:
- h3 or h4 headings,
- colors, italics, underline,
- lists (like this one)
- alignment
Should make your posts reflect better what you have in mind.
Also very important, don't hesitate to
share your thoughts on the game, not just report back with match progress or transfers summary.
Kind regards